Slice Of Life Story

By Anonymous -
See You Again Sea!

      Splash! As the sea water is going through my pajama, I felt so calm. My feeling when I am in the sea, I felt so relax as the wind pushes the water towards the beach. When I am sitting on this yellowish sand on the ground with some dead corals. I suddenly flashback to last year vacation when I went to the beach with my family. I am so scared of the small crabs and other tiny animals like shrimps or clams in the sea. I could barely walk on sand or going into the sea. Well, that did not happen this year when we went to Koh Chang, which is an island, during the Songkran break. On the next morning, I thought as I woke up and find out that my cousins are swimming in the sea with their dad, which makes me jealous because I wanted to swim too! I felt like the sea is whispering to me, telling me to go down.

"Daddy can I swim too?" I asked

"Of course you can!" he replied

"Do I have to change?" I said

"You don't have to." he answered back.

"GREAT!" I shouted.

Less than a minute, I quickly jumped down into the sea and say,

"WOO! HOO!" 

But now it's already 8 a.m., so it's time for breakfast!

"Breakfast time! Breakfast time!" my dad said.

In that time, I am so hungry, I could eat like a starving tiger. I am very happy but sad at the same time. Because, I am hungry and I will get to eat soon but I have to say good- bye to the sea. As we came up from the sea, I turned around and say

"BYE BYE SEA! We'll meet again tomorrow morning!"

Comments

  1. AnonymousJanuary 19, 2016 at 6:17 PM

    I like who you added dialog. You added a lot of detail about the setting.

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 21, 2016 at 8:24 PM

    Well done focusing your story on one idea and developing it with many details!

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